Jo LB The Bittern Two sets of words - Which one?

 There are two versions of words for my key stage i book can you give me some feed back - thanks

Version 1

You may never see a bittern,

He is so secretive and shy.

You may never see a bittern

because he likes to hide

You may never see a bittern,

When he’s new and on his nest.

He has a wispy little crown

and soft and fluffy fuzzy down 

You may never see a bittern

When he is looking for his lunch.

He creeps among the stalky reeds

With eyes like yellow shiny beads

You may never see a bittern

When his eyes are on his prey

He likes a frog or vole or fish

and he darts to catch his dish

You may never see a bittern

He has many ways to hide.

He makes his body tall and thin

or straight and pointy like a pin.

You may never see a bittern

You could watch the reeds all day.

                      It could be there are so few

or he might be watching you

You may never see a bittern

But you might hear one ………. BURP

OR

Version 2

You may never see a bittern

He is so difficult to spot

He’s very shy and secretive

and he always hides a lot

You may never see a bittern,

When he’s new and on his nest.

With lovely soft and fluffy down

and a funny little crest

 

You may never see a bittern

When he’s looking all around.

He creeps among the stalky reeds

he never makes a sound

You may never see a bittern

When his eyes are on his prey

He likes a fish, a frog or vole

He wants one every day

You may never see a bittern

He has many ways to hide.

He makes his body tall and thin

or flattened down and wide.

You may never see a bittern

You could watch the reeds all day.

He might be standing watching you

It’s impossible to say

                     

You may never see a bittern

but if you ever heard

you would certainly remember

The day a Bittern Burped